The place where it starts
The starting point:
Robert opens the door, meets a lovely employee that helps him get started with his membership. As he walks in, the smell of steel and iron from the weights and the scent of sweat hits him in the face. As he gets done with all the process of signing up, he hopes into a treadmill that was right in front of him. He struggles a bit as it’s been a while on the treadmill, but in a few minutes he got a hang on it. It wasn’t his first time at the gym, he had skipped the gym for such a long time that he was a bit scared of how his first day was gonna fo. There were many people around him, all positive and welcoming. But still there was a guilt inside him, which made him feel like he was accountable for something wrong.
Robert back then was the guy that would always cheer up everyone at the gym, and would always motivate to keep going on. But due to him losing his job, leading him to thinking that his future is ruined. It caused a lot of mental stress on him, so he stopped going to the gym. Now, he’s someone who questions himself, whether he’s the one that belongs here or not.
He goes up to the empty bench, and puts a 25lb on each side of the bar. He’s PR was 205lb once, him thinking about that makes him a little sad on how he went down so much. But he takes a heavy breath, lays down and says:
“Here goes nothing”
Rising part:
His first few workouts felt like hell, as it’s been a while and also he had an ego on how he used to pick up many heavy weights and now he struggles with it. As he finishes his cardio, he feels tired and weak, wanting to get out. But he pushes himself no matter what. As he looks around, he sees people in better shape like lean, muscular, and intense. He gets nervous with those thoughts. After his chest workout he leaves for the day.
The next day, Robert was doing back, he all of a sudden felt very bad, since he was pushing himself quite a lot. As he was struggling, someone holded his bar with him to help him finish his set.
That person was the trainer at that gym, he goes’
“Hey man, are you alright?”
Roberts gets nervous and says
“Yea, I’m fine. Thank you for helping me”
The trainer smiles and say
“Of course man, By the way I have to say you had a really good form man, keep up the work.”
Robert smiles and say
“Thank you, I really appreciate that. I was just a tired”
Trainer looks at him with care and says
“Listen man, don’t push yourself too hard. I think you did pretty good for today. You should leave for today. Also I’m always at the gym, let me know if you ever need any help with anything. Oh and what’s your name?”
Robert says
“I appreciate that a lot man, yea my name is Robert”
Trainer shakes his hand and says
“Alright Robert, I will see you next time man.”
Robert leaves the gym.
Unstoppable momentum:
Few months in, Robert gets a lot more comfortable and his workouts no longer make him feel bad, rather make him feel safe and give him a sense of achievement. He’s a whole new man, not only physically but also mentally.
Robert notices someone just like him, seemed a little scared and confused. Awkwardly standing with a dumble not sure what to do. Roberts sense the self doubt in him as well, he goes toward him and asks nicely
“Hey man, first time in the gym?”
The boys looks at him with shyness and say
“Yes, sorry if I bothered you.”
Robert smiles and says
“Nah man, you’re absolutely fine. Listen man, I’ve been there before too, so if you have any questions, please feel free to ask.
He smiles at Robert
“Thank you, I really appreciate that”
To Robert, the gym was no longer a place where just get a workout in, but a place where it brought a sense of achievement and made people good for who they are.
At the end of his workout he realizes that, we don’t have to wait for motivation to start something, it’s something we can bring ourselves.
Reflection Questions:
What inspired your story, and why did you choose this idea to expand upon (or create anew)?
My story relates to me a lot, as for someone who workout, there is always a starting point for all of us. My main idea for us was that we are all scared when we start something, or when we do a thing that we haven’t done in a while.
What choices did you make to develop the characters, and how do those choices shape the reader’s understanding of them?
I chose 2 characters to help him develop his character setting. Like in the middle part I chose the trainer as someone who gives him hope on what he’s trying to achieve and in the last part I used the other guys as a reminder for Robert to reflect on himself and see a new version of himself.
What aspects of your story are you most proud of, and why?
The part I am proud of is the part where the story gives us a reality check and tells us how we should slow down our pace when things feel heavy for us.
What message, feeling, or experience do you hope your audience takes away from reading your story?
My message wasn’t about telling people to work but, but to put out a message that in our like more or less likely we are going to be scared to start something and it okay to be scared. But we all should take small steps to achieve the thing that we want.
If you had more time to revise, what changes would you make, and why?
I would add more to the ending. To me, I’m not completely convinced with the ending. And maybe add more points to the message that I’m trying to put out.